Hack Slash Burn – Video Revision Exercise

I’m playing around here with prose editing techniques, with help from a writer who graciously agreed to let me invade her draft:

A few things I forgot to say in the video:

  • There’s nothing inherently wrong with that three-stuck paragraph. I am a big proponent of just writing the messy first draft and fine-tuning forever.
  • My edit introduced a repetition of its own–there are now two incidences of “reach.”
  • Say whatever you like about the edits I’ve made, but remember to be respectful of person who created the original paragraph. I don’t generally police comments in this blog, and I’d like to continue not having to.

Would you watch more of these? Even if they don’t include kittens? Let me know.